Overpipulation in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. What are the cause of this? How can this problem be solved?
The overcrowding of urban centers becoming the primary risk in many nations as people look for decent job opportunities. However, a program regarding equal job opportunities granted by the government could tackle this problem.
Better employment opportunities are why the overcrowding of mega-cities happened, providing hope for improving one's life. To put it simply, the job opportunities found in the outskirts area are inadequate to accommodate people's basic needs. For instance, a survey done by The Ministry of Manpower in 2019 revealed that around 20% of Jakarta's workers come from the suburban area of Yogyakarta due to the small amount of minimum salary they get in a month, only 1,2 Million IDR. This condition is five times smaller than what they get from working in Jakarta. Thus, people from the countryside tend to prefer working in big cities.
The approach to solve this issue is to provide equal job opportunities in the sub-urban areas, preventing people from doing urbanization that leads to overpopulation in urban centers. When people feel that their basic necessities are met, they would think that it is no use for them to travel far from their homes for jobs. As shown by a study conducted by the Faculty of Economics in 2020, the expansion of manufacturing factories in the outskirt of Bantul opened 100,000 employment, decreasing the number of people migrated to Jogjakarta. This is caused by the salary given being twice higher than Jogjakarta’s.
In all, the overpopulation in big cities is caused by people who look for decent job opportunities. However, an equalization of job opportunities could tackle this problem. Thus, overpopulation would be solved in the long run.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... happened, providing hope for improving ones life. To put it simply, the job opportu...
^^^^
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'outskirts'' or 'outskirt's'?
Suggestion: outskirts'; outskirt's
...ply, the job opportunities found in the outskirts area are inadequate to accommodate peop...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...an centers. When people feel that their basic necessities are met, they would think that it is no...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, regarding, so, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 10.4138276553 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22545454545 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0836277873 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567272727273 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6852124967 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.642857143 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173857676362 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663514141131 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634535836893 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12063528964 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458741588441 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... happened, providing hope for improving ones life. To put it simply, the job opportu...
^^^^
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'outskirts'' or 'outskirt's'?
Suggestion: outskirts'; outskirt's
...ply, the job opportunities found in the outskirts area are inadequate to accommodate peop...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...an centers. When people feel that their basic necessities are met, they would think that it is no...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, regarding, so, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 10.4138276553 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22545454545 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0836277873 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567272727273 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6852124967 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.642857143 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 7.06120827912 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173857676362 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663514141131 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634535836893 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12063528964 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458741588441 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.