Some people think personal happiness is directly related to economic success, while others believe this depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
While some people believe that financial success is conducive to personal joy, others think that happiness can be attributed to other factors. There is indeed a strong case to be made for both sides of the debate, which will be discussed now.
It is true that achieving economic success brings about great wealth, which certainly contributes to happiness. Given that affluent people are free to purchase anything they want and pursue their personal interests, they tend to be more satisfied and content with their lives. For instance, someone who has accumulated enough wealth to buy expensive art equipment and take professional art courses is likely to be happier than those who are passionate about arts but cannot afford such things. In addition, by acquiring financial prosperity, individuals have the means to bond with their family members and friends by giving them extravagant gifts or taking them on lavish vacations. This means that their personal relationships will be strengthened and, in turn, their well-being will be more ensured.
However, I would argue that there are many factors responsible for happiness, apart from economic wealth. Chief of these is job satisfaction, as people who are working in a job they genuinely enjoy may feel content, regardless of how much money they make. Added to this is romantic love, which is also a major contributor to one’s happiness. There is no doubt in my mind that even impoverished individuals will become happy if they can spend their lifetime standing by their romantic soulmate. Meanwhile, multiple top-class billionaires, namely Jeff Bezos and Bill Gates have recently undergone broken marriages, despite their unimaginable wealth. This begs the question of whether wealth can truly bring love and happiness.
In summary, while I acknowledge that economic success can play a vital part in happiness, it is my conviction that other factors namely job contentment and romance are of comparable importance to people’s well-being.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: whether; the question whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, apart from, for instance, in addition, in summary, no doubt, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35443037975 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8154385875 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626582278481 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4011308985 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.857142857 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197850131756 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700169757037 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968703292752 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153576493047 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108168351245 0.056905535591 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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