The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years.Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend?
Regarding the reasons of increasing portion of youth who are facing with obesity in developed countries over last decade, we need to focus on psychological components of modern lifestyle and the implemented tricks that huge food and beverage companies are widely using based on them.
Looking at contemporary society and its disadvantages in developing a healthy lifestyle in adolescents, the most conspicuous approach is the insatiable interest of families in acquisitiveness and the growing demand of consumption for goods that are not of necessity. Subsequently, the children who initially tries to imitate their parents, would easily fall for ultra-processed foods and drinks, which have been produced in laboratories instead of kitchens, in virtue of peer pressure and also the eye-catching appearance of these products.
Considering the recent developments of advertising industry, huge brands and franchises are well-equipped with the recourses that can help them in order to create provocative and misleading advertisements more efficiently. As a consequence, the youngsters, who are not properly aware of companies’ goals in building ubiquitous billboards, catchy slogans, and omnipresent internet pop-ups, will trap in brand attachment and health halo which was subtly instilled by mentioned organizations
To conclude, prior to any obvious cause, we should first take both psychological aspects of companies which produce unhealthy foods with excessive amounts of sugar and fat, and also new values of western society into account. For instance, in on hand, the consumption algorithm that is constantly encouraging people to eat more and more harmful products without considering the petrifying effects of them, and on the other hand, the vast investment of international brands in new advertising methods in order to entice the young.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, regarding, so, still, well, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71014492754 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29756327392 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648550724638 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 20.2975951904 227% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.1998024972 49.4020404114 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 262.666666667 106.682146367 246% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 46.0 20.7667163134 222% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0564681612707 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0248064595691 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0138674170907 0.0667982634062 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0320916717953 0.151304729494 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019342611382 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.5 13.0946893788 218% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 7.87 50.2224549098 16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.6 11.3001002004 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.73 12.4159519038 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.64 8.58950901804 136% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 22.0 9.78957915832 225% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.1190380762 202% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 10.7795591182 269% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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