You work in a busy but poorly organised office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department.
Write a letter to your employer.
In the letter ask to be considered for this job explain why you would be a suitable candidate outline the current problems and the changes you would like to make
You should write at least 150 words.
Dear Mr.John,
I am writing to thank you for your recent decision to employ a supervisor to enhance the seals department performance and flexibility.
I think that I can be a qualified candidate for this job position and I appreciate if you consider me about this role. I studied business management at university and worked for 10 years as a senior manager assistant. Several of the processes we are using in our company were designed by me in the last two years that worked to improve the seals' network in other countries in the past two years.
If you put me in this job position, I will make many changes in our department. Over the course of my work days, I will learn the staff of our seals by myself, I will utilize updated programs to organize our department better than it was, and so on.
It would be my pleasure to be considered. If you choose me, I will never disappoint you.
Yours faithfully,
Sarha
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: John
Dear Mr.John, I am writing to thank you for your ...
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Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'seals'' or 'seal's'?
Suggestion: seals'; seal's
...n to employ a supervisor to enhance the seals department performance and flexibility....
^^^^^
Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ate if you consider me about this role. I studied business management at universi...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 5.60731707317 624% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 766.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61445783133 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71691421967 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632530120482 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 1.53170731707 588% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.6762126316 43.030603864 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1111111111 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 5.23603664747 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324161387796 0.215688989381 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133440153432 0.103423049105 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825043349519 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197666485884 0.15604864568 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841406574051 0.0819641961636 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.2329268293 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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