Nowadays people depend on technology for leisure activities. Is this a positive or
negative development?
In recent years, an upward trend in the use of electronic devices in free time can be seen throughout the world. Although it lessens the need for unwanted expenses as well as stimulates the growth of the economy, a huge threat is brought to not only the user’s lifestyle but also to their personal information.
It is undeniable the merits of using electronic devices may bring to modern society these days when it comes to entertainment. Firstly, it greatly reduces the extra fees to spend on our leisure activities. With just a portable smartphone or laptop, you are given access to thousands of forms of entertainment, from watching a football match on the other side of the continent to listening to the music of famous singers for free without going to a concert. In other words, you can enjoy everything you want at home while lowering the expenditure of these activities. Secondly, with the sharp increase in the use of technology for free time activities, people tend to spend more on high-tech devices for entertainment, with virtual reality glasses, Playstation 5 can be set as an example of this phenomenon. In addition to the affordable price, the amenities that it brings to us contribute greatly to the spending of people around the world and help foster economic growth.
However, we can’t deny the negative effects it may bring to us. First, the increasing time in the use of electronic devices will prevent us from participating in essential outdoor activities which will not only increase the rate of obesity and other diseases but also make our social skills dull. An alarming increase rate of obesity can be seen around the world due to the lack of exercise and outdoor activities, which is caused majorly by the addiction to playing games or watching films. Furthermore, people may be attacked in the online environment by cyber crimes. These criminals will take advantage of the hole in the security of your computers and steal away valuable information of yours, for instance, the number of credit cards, email addresses, and so on. Which will lead to horrible consequences in the loss of money or even put the life of the victims in danger.
In conclusion, despite the economic advantages it brings to one person and the economy of the world, we still need to keep an eye on the negative it may bring to one person’s lifestyle and internet safety.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 405.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88395061728 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78865907163 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543209876543 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.6156545765 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.866666667 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111327462008 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337356730448 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369644801982 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.055769832299 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336415211862 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.