An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
In the context of the argument topic it is discussed as by the experimental findings of an international development on the ground of checking the Vitamin A deficiency among people of Tagus, a new breed of millet has been found.Now certain queries are developed as this solution to the Vitamin A deficiency problem is costly and farmers will get subsidies for that which increases the governmental cost in the field of agriculture.
Now in the light of the above discussion it can be questioned that as this newly developed millet is costly and the subsidies are also being provided to farmers which increases the agricultural cost of a society does not accurately imply it will help to overcome the complete Vitamin A deficiency problem.This can also be supported by the claim that not only Vitamin A but also other Vitamins like B, C, D, E, K along with different minerals are the essential constituents of human body thus increase in agricultural cost only for the production of millet comprising more Vitamin A may not be a fruitful solution to the above problem.
As the millet is already a staple food in Tagus and will be easily accepted this claim is though supporting the farming of the the costly millet but also undermines the possibility that the fund government will provide in this field can be efficiently utilised in other fields in order to improve the lifestyle of the Tagus.
Though it is mentioned in the passage that the newly found millet do posses high Vitamin A but no evidence i.e. Vitamin A content is mentioned thus by utilising funds in an erudite way and also by increasing the farming of the substances like green vegetables, commonly available millet which comprises of moderate Vitamin A the unnecessary cost can be alleviated.
As the farmers are getting subsidies for farming new variety of millet this may generate some chicanery in them to create an artificial dearth of the millet seeds which is very costly itself
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 335 350
No. of Characters: 1603 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.278 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.785 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.797 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.713 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.538 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.912 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.188 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Now
...s, a new breed of millet has been found.Now certain queries are developed as this s...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...al cost of a society does not accurately imply it will help to overcome the compl...
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Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...e complete Vitamin A deficiency problem.This can also be supported by the claim that...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: A_BUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
...rted by the claim that not only Vitamin A but also other Vitamins like B, C, D, E, K ...
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Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...aim is though supporting the farming of the the costly millet but also undermines the p...
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Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...aim is though supporting the farming of the the costly millet but also undermines the p...
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Line 13, column 90, Rule ID: A_BUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
...wly found millet do posses high Vitamin A but no evidence i.e. Vitamin A content is m...
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Line 13, column 168, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an erudite way" with adverb for "erudite"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...nt is mentioned thus by utilising funds in an erudite way and also by increasing the farming of t...
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Line 13, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en vegetables, commonly available millet which comprises of moderate Vitamin A th...
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Line 13, column 295, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
...ables, commonly available millet which comprises of moderate Vitamin A the unnecessary cost...
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Line 13, column 325, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'A' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: A; The
...et which comprises of moderate Vitamin A the unnecessary cost can be alleviated. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 333.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92192192192 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84667895249 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477477477477 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 66.0 22.8473053892 289% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 146.069846306 57.8364921388 253% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 327.8 119.503703932 274% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.6 23.324526521 286% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453194563935 0.218282227539 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.263387924221 0.0743258471296 354% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802210065961 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263387924221 0.128457276422 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802210065961 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.0 14.3799401198 243% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 4.49 48.3550499002 9% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.1628742515 222% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.0 12.197005988 238% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.32208582834 127% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.4 11.1389221557 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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