When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
Have you ever tried for something hard and didn’t gain any positive point of success? Sometimes people try to do their best but there is no chance for a win. On the other hand, for some people there is no doubt about being success and they will get it. In my view, access to a sense of success by chance is not actually something that we could obtain without hard work, however, sometimes hardworking is a matter of mind. People try to think positively about the world around and it’s not an easy job to do because an individual most focus on his mind not just on body for a hard working. I feel this for two following reason that will explore in the essay.
First of all, relaxing is an important aspect of the people who become success without a pressure on their body to be successful. Consequently, chance as a kind of virtual subject most be in the view of the person who tries to get something important. My personal experience is an compelling example of this, entrance exam of universities is an annoying test that all student in my country should take part in, as I was thinking to gain the best position in the university, I did my best effort but I didn’t have enough concentration and I lost the chance that I need to get a success in this matter. I suppose, lack of a relax mind made my day a luckless one.
Secondly, some people consider that chance is a kind of yes or no question, which means that you could have it or not, however, it seems there is a spectrum of being chancy. People who believe on their own are at top of the spectrum, they try hard to make a believe on themselves. For instance, one of my friends who is an actor tries all the time in rehearsals to do his best, indeed, he didn’t feel any success due to a wrong believe in himself. He supposes that there is no chance for someone like him to get a vital role in a play which makes his work harsh to do.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that luck is an accessible matter by a hard work not only by body and outside world but also by mind and inner world of every individual. This is because of the sense of relaxing and because of believe of someone in him/her self.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ng important. My personal experience is an compelling example of this, entrance ex...
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Line 3, column 626, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...cess in this matter. I suppose, lack of a relax mind made my day a luckless one. Seco...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... of the spectrum, they try hard to make a believe on themselves. For instance, one of my ...
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Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...f the spectrum, they try hard to make a believe on themselves. For instance, one of my ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, i suppose, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.29611650485 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51211012603 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473300970874 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.6105119042 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.625 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4375 5.45110844103 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140368180226 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528777918315 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279765129004 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923885760538 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399397626966 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.96 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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