Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. Do you agree or disagree?
People have different views about whether or not criminals should be punished by being put into prison. In my opinion, it would be better if the government provided offenders with education and job training.
It is true that putting criminals to prison could guarantee safety for the society, because those people would not be able to commit more crimes. However, I believe it is more disadvantageous when all offenders are forced to go to jail. The cost of running and managing prisons is often costly as the government needs to invest much money on facilities and security. Furthermore, when criminals have to lose freedom and spend years of their lives in prison, they could become resentful. This would prevent them from being a good citizen after being released, which is a negative impact.
Personally, I believe education and job training are the best methods that can be used to help criminals become better citizens. Firstly, education could change offenders’ attitude in a positive way. Being educated, criminals would be able to distinguish between right and wrong, and they would realise that it is unacceptable to break the law. Secondly, job training is extremely important for criminals as it helps them to achieve a normal career after completing their sentence. Many people commit crimes due to their lack of money and become criminals such as burglars or robbers. Providing job training would help them earn a living when coming back to the society, and they would no longer have motivation to reoffend.
In conclusion, I think the government should provide education and job training for criminals rather than send them to prison.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
People have different views about whether or not criminals should be punished by being p...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...cation could change offenders’ attitude in a positive way. Being educated, criminals would be abl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1390.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12915129151 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68729961613 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560885608856 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.3848363213 49.4020404114 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.2857142857 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289754751325 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105862553685 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936060344414 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200111541143 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0905405639332 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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