Parents of obese children need to be punished for making them fat, do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, Obesity has become an alarming issue in children. Some believe that over-weight children's parents need to be punished as they are accountable for making them out of shape. This essay disagrees with this statement because parents do not have control over their children all the time and genetics can play an important role.
Firstly, Parents cannot have full control over the child full-time. Children can intake a large number of calories when at school where they do not require their permission and cannot be supervised by parents and this would pass on unknowingly from mother or father. Furthermore, children spent quite of their daily time at schools and usually canteens do not provide the healthiest food. therefore, it is agreeable to say that junk food consists of a large portion of kids' dietary intake. For instance, a recent study has shown children take around 75% of their daily required calories at schools in the form of unhealthy food.
Secondly, genetics could be an effective factor in children gaining weight. Youths' bodies with obese parents tend to follow the same genetic disposition of their elders, which means, the child has no control over the way his/her body metabolizes the diet. Even the smallest calory intake can affect some children more than those without the genetic-marker for obesity. Recent research concluded that almost every child born of obese parents has a high tendency to become one even with dietary control.
To conclude, over-weight children's parents should not be punished as there are factors, they do not have control over such as school time or genetics.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...he child full-time. Children can intake a large number of calories when at school where they do n...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ens do not provide the healthiest food. therefore, it is agreeable to say that junk food ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17045454545 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52664576465 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594696969697 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9213724254 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288667343089 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10614793584 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865573280978 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195456952159 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910570898675 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...he child full-time. Children can intake a large number of calories when at school where they do n...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ens do not provide the healthiest food. therefore, it is agreeable to say that junk food ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17045454545 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52664576465 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594696969697 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9213724254 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288667343089 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10614793584 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865573280978 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195456952159 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910570898675 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.