If you want to choose a purpose, which one do you choose?
Helping other people
Enhancing time management
Improving physical well-being and eating healthy food
It goes without saying that there are both positive and negative aspects of having each of these aims.In this line of thought there has been always a controversial question, whether it is more reseanable to put managing the time, helping other people or physical situation as a priority in our lives. Some people believe that we are born to help each other, while others hold different opinions, stating that personal life matters like time and our body's physical status is more important. But if I have to choose between these three options,I would concur with the first approach to my life, on which I will elaborate in the subsequent paragraphs.
The first exquisite reason to be mentioned is that providing aid and support for other people have a social impact, so the sub results of this aim is more likely to be satisfying.In other words, by doing philanthropian tasks, we can impact our world, and consequesly, we have an indirect influence in our personal life. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influence by my own personal experience.I can remember a time in which I was exhuasted and tired of my city's environment, accidentally I came up to an announcement which asked for volunteers to clean the twon.Honestly,I was so reluctant at first saying that why I should clean the city as I am paying taxes? but when I registered at the group and participated in the program, not only the neighbourhood was cleaner than ever, but also I felt awsome! Because I have a ting role in helping myself to feel better in that atmosphere.
Another equally noteworthy point corroborrating my Stance is that the help comes back to you when you need it.In fact, considering butterly effect aying that every single act in our life returns to us, It act like that we need it.Drawing from my experience, I used to help my friend to solve complex math questions during highschool, years later, when I had to pass statics which was my fible at collage, One of my classmates helped me for hours to overcome my obstacle.It is certainly clear to see the more you give assistance to others, The more you get help when you are in need.
To sum up, Taking all aforementioned reasons and points into account, One can certainly conclude is that setinng helping people as a life time goal is a gurantee.This is because in this way not only have a influence on the universe, but also it comes back to you when you need it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, honestly, if, so, while, in fact, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69230769231 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80012667698 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547785547786 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 53.0 20.1344086022 263% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 125.104393908 48.9658058833 255% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 251.625 100.406767564 251% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 53.625 20.6045352989 260% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.625 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220922033938 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946945246742 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440975066936 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137358215535 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344674974371 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.5 11.7677419355 234% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 58.1214874552 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.8 10.1575268817 224% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.81 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.2 10.0537634409 231% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 23.0 10.247311828 224% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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