In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
It’s true that children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough in some cultures. In my opinion, I encouraged people to say it to their children, But I proposed that we use it carefully and for a good cause.
There’s a good explanation why a lot of people said it to their own children or students. People tend to use it as some kind of motivation that they can do anything their own children. In my past, my parents used it all the time or me to get motivated to be a good and rich doctor because I can help sick poor people in the future. It’s also being use as an attempt to give their children a spirit to study or do something meaningful for them. When my parents said that I can achieve being a doctor by studying hard enough, I studied for hours and forced my self to love biology lessons.
But as of now, being a grown up, I still think that what my parents said is right. Now, I love helping other people in need, I have a goal to help a lot of people in the future. But the problem is as reality hits a lot of adolescents, they tend to give up and being more realistic. When teenager face the reality that hits them, all of their spirit, delusion, the spirit that they can do anything is now dead because of competition with others. They can’t help but blame themselves. Even some teenager now is facing depression because they lose hope, all their expectation as a child lost nowhere.
In conclusion, while telling children that sentence as a pursue of motivation, it develops frustration in the future. That’s why telling them but with caution and tell them about reality carefully is a decent idea in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 56, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...while telling children that sentence as a pursue of motivation, it develops frustration ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, even so, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39032258065 5.12529762239 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47816898941 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477419354839 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4578440661 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.7333333333 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29074020249 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117665523346 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152012527027 0.0667982634062 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203139184114 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151063073445 0.056905535591 265% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 12.4159519038 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 78.4519038076 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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