IELTS Essay: Traditional Festivals
In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing.
What problems is this causing?
What measures could be taken to counter this situation?
Nowadays, some traditional festivals and ceremonial celebrations are now on the brink of dying out. In my opinion, this predicament is caused by the difference in political ideologies of increasingly oppressive states and the effects of a rapidly-changing world.
One cause of the dissipation of these celebrations generally concerns the systematic repression of the ethnic minorities imposed in autocratic states. These ethnic groups are forced to change their traditional lifestyles and cultures to assimilate with the majority. For example, in Xinjiang, the Chinese government is currently engaged in eradicating the local Uighur culture in order to ensure uniformity in the country. Many ethnic people have been arrested and put in reduction camps for practicing long-established religious celebrations and being overly religious, resulting in the loss of their unique traditions. Furthermore, as more cultural groups have greater access to the outside world and move out of their hometowns to find food and jobs, it will be hard for them to maintain their old traditions to pass on to the next generation because of the enormous influence of modern lifestyle and globalization.
International action, individuals, and initiatives promoted by governments worldwide are the best solutions to stop traditional cultures from vanishing. In light of recent events in Xinjiang, the United Nations condemned China for its brutality against the Uighur people and took action to put pressure on China to stop the oppression. International communities now defend these groups to help them continue maintaining their traditional customs and religions. Nevertheless, governments in any part of the world can make the most significant change; for instance, states can set up programs locally or virtually that aim to promote traditional festivals and educate young people on the importance of preserving traditions. This happens already in many universities and schools across Vietnam, where traditional festivals are held for students to encourage the wearing of traditional clothes and celebrating the culture of ethnic minorities.
In conclusion, the loss of traditional festivals is caused by authoritative state policies or is a by-product of globalization, which threatens and damages the cultural identity of various groups. The action of individuals and governments can tackle this development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75561797753 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31677109873 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.3791432496 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.357142857 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222174467386 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784849828851 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563542683539 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151697164931 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409896470199 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.15 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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