Some people say that it is the responsibility of individuals to save money for their own care after they retire.
To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.
As the baby boomers born in the post-WWII period exceed their retirement age, they are placing an incredibly tremendous burden on society. The ensuing rapid depletion of social security fund and strained financial sources available have prompted many to save up sufficient money for their own good after they retire. This alternative possibility is obviously not rested on solid ground. From my personal standpoint, the shared responsibilities among individuals, the government, and the young generation could benefit the sake of both the retired and the government finance.
Retired elderly people are often labeled as being overly financially dependent because they have no access to any source of income, and their expenses would culminate into quite a formidable figure. Be this as it may, it is still regarded as the primary responsibility of the government to take care of the retired in consideration of their immense contributions to our society before they reach retirement age. Once they leave their jobs of physical inferiority, the government should, beyond no doubt, assume the obligation to look after them in return for their contributions. Besides, children of the retired are also expected to share the burden of taking care of their parents which could be regarded as a means of paying their due filial piety.
Some people might argue that elderly people are gradually exhausting a large number of social funds posing a serious threat to economic development and significantly undermining any potential endeavor to be mounted in other areas. Apparently, this could hardly be justified. However, one main argument against the financial burden of the retired is that the well-being of the retired people is as important as any other issue confronting any government. They are as much entitled to social welfare as any other issues confronting any government. They are as much entitled to social welfare as any other group of people. In fact, they constitute the majority of people who deserve financial support offered by the government. Unless the government budget is downsized, a pension fund will be a practical option to provide protection for employees and the retired.
The pension scheme definitely plays an essential role in guaranteeing the self-sufficient life of retired people. As long as both the government and the younger generation show their share responsibilities, the lives of the retired, as well as the society, would be much better off.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...elderly people are gradually exhausting a large number of social funds posing a serious threat to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, well, in fact, no doubt, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31297709924 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9848423695 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549618320611 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6823082784 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.823529412 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194438348384 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609962502223 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443772866594 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116091553256 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592338423013 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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