Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Currently, young adults use most of their spare time in shopping centers. I personally believe this tendency has both positive and negative impacts on young people and the society, which will be discussed.
On the one hand, there are some benefits of the youth spending free time in shopping plaza. Firstly, young individuals are likely to remember exactly location of products they want to buy. This helps them save time choosing and finding goods in a large shopping mall with a wide range of commoditiesy, especially in some days before special holidays such as Christmas or Nnew year Year when stores are always crowded. Secondly, many stores are able to have more regular customers. Take my sister as an example, last year every time her favorite fashion stores having new goods or big sales events, she recommended to her friends these places and they all went to there and bought some clothes.
On the other hand, spending too much time in market places can be negative in several ways. The first drawback is that the youth would not have time to study or attend other activities. Therefore, they may have to deal with face poor class performances and the lack of useful skills gained from social activities to prepare for their life. In addition, due to meager income, the youthful people can deep in debt if they do not control their expenses for shopping carefully. Some of them are likely to commit crime to pay off their debts. This leads to increase the criminal rate in where they live and has detrimental effects on society.
In conclusion, I accept that young citizens spending too much their free time in shopping malls has several benefits. However, I believe that the potential problems are more significant.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 376, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: year
...cial holidays such as Christmas or Nnew year Year when stores are always crowded. Secondl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89455782313 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43683923932 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608843537415 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9421427129 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9333333333 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344977209418 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101668701336 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625177585321 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203571009178 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403064041229 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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