Some people think that young people should follow the traditions of the society. Others think young people are free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Living in traditional ways has always been a controversial topic for generations. Many people think that the young should follow social customs, while the others argue that individualism is important so they should be free to behave individually.
On the one hand, it is reasonable for adults to insist on teenagers living in traditional ways. Because they have got a lot of valuable experiences from their own lives, which they want to pass down to their children. Besides, following culturally related traditions helps people shape their cultural identity. For instance, many Vietnamese-Americans still wear Vietnam’s traditional customs and celebrate the Tet holiday in America, even though they have not lived in their hometown for several years.
On the other hand, teenagers nowadays prefer to live freely so they do not want to be inhibited by social customs. These traditions sometimes make sexist remarks about women and men. That is the reason why they fight for the right to be fair. For example, the percentage of females who are admitted to get a job in a company is always lower than a male's one. It limits social potential. Moreover, some of the social customs are out of date such as getting married at the age of 15 or housework is all for women.
In conclusion, in my view, although there are many aspects of following the traditions, the drawbacks outweigh benefits. So I still believe that people should live freely, but they should follow some traditions that they find interesting, positive, and helpful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
.... It limits social potential. Moreover, some of the social customs are out of date such as ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10317460317 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88346560543 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623015873016 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2622276249 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8571428571 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208199916478 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672201985418 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101802775493 0.0667982634062 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157594866704 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116133580329 0.056905535591 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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