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At first we read an astounding short story by Jackson Jodie Daviss - a proficient writer with a finely honed adeptness in writing- entitled Gotta Perform. This work of art is about Katie, a girl who left home after facing rigorous dissents from her dreams and notions. She went through lots of difficulties nonetheless, never did she admitted to back off . At the end of the day, eventually she was flying. flying with her wings dancing on the pavement sounding tik tik taka taka. Author of this amazing astonishment attained a literary award in 1984.
Additionally, we examined a beneficial passage about different kinds of performance in different kinds of cultures written by Rosemary. as a lemma, it arrays how performing learns poise, manners, civility, social graces and RESPECT to kids. all of these social necessities are being learnt on a stage which expose alliance, happiness, and dealing with a duches without having any purposes, some bad ones.
To link up, we can say these 2 topics are about victims. North Star is trying to say that without sacrificing our values which are worthy for us, we cant bring our dreams into reality. they can be our family, our reputations and honors, all those memories which were made with worning out lots of VCR s and pairs of toe shoes. alternatively this victim can be your freedom. the freedom which was dedicated in order to gain importance and significance, in order to BE important and significant. additionally all of these can be obtained somehow by learning social graces and by losing the joy in being messy, in your tucked in shirt, in that higgedy piggledy hair cut and style. in freedom. having no one to order you.
to make an abstract, we can say these two articles are in opposite sides. Katie is sacrificing her social graces and family to achieve freedom, but on the other hand, those kids are sacrificing their freedom in order to accomplish honor and civility.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...less, never did she admitted to back off . At the end of the day, eventually she w...
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Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Flying
... of the day, eventually she was flying. flying with her wings dancing on the pavement ...
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Line 1, column 463, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: tik
... wings dancing on the pavement sounding tik tik taka taka. Author of this amazing aston...
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Line 1, column 471, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: taka
...ancing on the pavement sounding tik tik taka taka. Author of this amazing astonishment at...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
... kinds of cultures written by Rosemary. as a lemma, it arrays how performing learn...
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Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to poise'
Suggestion: to poise
... lemma, it arrays how performing learns poise, manners, civility, social graces and R...
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Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...ity, social graces and RESPECT to kids. all of these social necessities are being l...
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Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... our values which are worthy for us, we cant bring our dreams into reality. they can...
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Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... we cant bring our dreams into reality. they can be our family, our reputations and ...
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Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun VCR seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of (VCR)'.
Suggestion: lots of (VCR)
...mories which were made with worning out lots of VCR s and pairs of toe shoes. alternatively...
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Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Alternatively
...t lots of VCR s and pairs of toe shoes. alternatively this victim can be your freedom. the fr...
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Line 5, column 375, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...tively this victim can be your freedom. the freedom which was dedicated in order to...
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Line 5, column 495, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Additionally
... order to BE important and significant. additionally all of these can be obtained somehow by...
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Line 5, column 495, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: additionally,
... order to BE important and significant. additionally all of these can be obtained somehow by...
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Line 5, column 679, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...at higgedy piggledy hair cut and style. in freedom. having no one to order you. ...
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Line 5, column 691, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Having
...iggledy hair cut and style. in freedom. having no one to order you. to make an abs...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...reedom. having no one to order you. to make an abstract, we can say these two ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nonetheless, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88449848024 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67647458697 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632218844985 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7141412968 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2777777778 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2777777778 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.77777777778 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0318992640685 0.236089414692 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00983215784485 0.076458572812 13% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417143129147 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0183949933089 0.150856017488 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318610630159 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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