Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that finding a job has been an issue in the modern world. While there are not enough opportunity for whole of the people, they are searching for a secure job. I think that people should search for jobs that satisfy them. I feel this due to two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
The first reason worth mentionin is that satisfaction in a job makes a job to be secure. To elucidate, when you take a job that you like that, you will work acurately so your works will be acceptable. While if you do not interest you work and you have take that becuse of its security, you cannot work as well and it becomes boring for you. So you pobabily leave that work because it does not satisfy you. For example, when my sister became graduated in the power electrical engineering, my uncle, who is the manager in the Tehran power station invited her to be employed there. Because she looked for a secure job and my uncle garanteed the security of the job, she accepted that. But after three month working, she leaved that. She says that there is boring a lot and cannot sustain its condition.Therefore, even people how look for a secure job should know that just satisfaction in the work can ensure your security.
Furthermore, working in a situation for a long time because it is secure while does not satisfy you can bring some problems for you. To clear, psychologically, if a person does not satisfaction relevant to its condition, specifically the job, it can cause a lot of long-term effects. For example, researches show that near 10 percent of depressed people are suffering from their job. It is because their job does not satisfy them. They have had a boring condition that they have not any willingness to maintain that but owning to the security of the job, they do not leave that. Hence, due to the impact of a satisfactory job on the human's health, people should search for a job that they like it.
In conclusion, taking a secure job cannot guarantee that you will maintain the job. In addition, to sustain the boring conditions of a job, due to its security, will cause a lot of mental disease for you. So it is better to look for a job that satisfies you.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...job, she accepted that. But after three month working, she leaved that. She says that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6305845358 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8369693499 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.9047619048 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0476190476 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354299074114 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130072441841 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649915561366 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249802390728 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199250198525 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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