Some people marry shortly after finishing college Others prefer to focus on their careers first and wait until later to get married Which of these situations do you think is better | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people marry shortly after finishing
college. Others prefer to focus on their
careers first and wait until later to get
married. Which of these situations do you
think is better?

Some people think that marring shortly after college is a good thing than focusing on carrier. However I strongly disagree with those people and I think that focusing on career and building a strong future is more important than marriage. I will support my viewpoints with two reasons.
First of all, even after a marriage mostly likely they have a work in an organization to make a living out of it. If their career basement is not strong enough, they might not be able to sustain in this competitive world. For example, my friend who is working in an MNC, even though he is a Mechanical Engineer, he build his career by working hard and now is in an good position to help his family financially. In these competitive world we have to build our career so that we have a happy life after marriage. One of my friend who got married in a young age was not able to handle the family pressure since she wasn't matured enough to handle the financial struggles of her family. It is important that we should focus on our career before marriage is because we can be prepared for the struggles in an family environment and it gives us experience.
Second of all, marriage is a huge burden on a couple. It imposes responsibility which they are not used to and they might feel difficult since they where not experienced with such responsibility. For instance, when a couple gets married in a young age they might have a tough job in finding an occupation since they are not much experienced which affects their family life. In my past, I have seem couples who are much more focused on their careers because they wanted their next generation to have a good life and they understand the cons of having less attention towards their career. Now it clearly explains that how marriage can be a huge burden on their shoulder and must plan it after building a career.
To conclude, the issue of marring just after college or focusing on career first is complex. Some suggest that marring early is a good thing because it will allow them to have more time with children and many more reasons. Nevertheless, I still contend that focusing on career plans and focusing on building our future with it more important and it will help in marriage life

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... a good thing than focusing on carrier. However I strongly disagree with those people a...
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Line 2, column 315, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'builds'.
Suggestion: builds
... though he is a Mechanical Engineer, he build his career by working hard and now is i...
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Line 2, column 362, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...is career by working hard and now is in an good position to help his family financ...
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Line 2, column 612, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...to handle the family pressure since she wasnt matured enough to handle the financial ...
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Line 2, column 751, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d focus on our career before marriage is because we can be prepared for the strug...
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Line 2, column 801, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...we can be prepared for the struggles in an family environment and it gives us expe...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: THEY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'were', the simple past of "to be"?
Suggestion: were
...nd they might feel difficult since they where not experienced with such responsibilit...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'seemed'.
Suggestion: seemed
...s their family life. In my past, I have seem couples who are much more focused on th...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, for example, for instance, i think, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58395989975 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5378609965 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461152882206 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5124297403 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.588235294 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197759954866 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714588719676 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633550533503 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131607335668 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341941865769 0.0645574589148 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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