For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
People have long been seeking ways to achieve success in their future jobs. While most people state that in order to become successful in your career, you should study hard, I tend to argue that attaining success in the future career depends strongly on having the ability to relate well to people. In the following essay, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First of all, having a good relationship with people can create an intimate working relationship among employees. As a result of this, employees share their opinions, experiences and so forth in order to help themselves avoid making mistakes in their career. For instance, five years ago, I worked for a pizza restaurant. Because I had good communicative skills, I could forge a good relationship with my colleagues. So, I easily asked my questions from them about performing the job like how to prepare pizza, how to do the job more quickly and efficiently. In other words, they gave me complete support, helping me prevent making common errors which they experienced in the first year of participating in their occupation. This also could enhance my chances of getting a promotion very soon. Thus, having a good relationship with other employees not only pave the way for career progression but also help you cope with the obstacles of the career you face without difficulty.
Another equally significant point is that people who have social skills can attract more customers in the marketing field, creating mutual trust between the company and clients. As a result of this, the companies' income will rise significantly, benefiting employees in numerous ways like having a high salary. For example, one of my friends worked for a company last year. Although she had spent a long time studying hard about marketing strategy, she finally got fired. This was because she was not only shy and reserved but also not able to communicate with people in order to advertise and sell the company's products, making the company face failure.
To conclude, I believe that relating well to people rather than studying hard will result in becoming successful in the future occupation. In this way, you can both use your colleagues ‘experiences and allure more customers. Thus, I highly recommend that people enhance their social skills to achieve success in their future vocations.
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- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only 3 days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work 5 days a week for shorter hours TPO 30 70
- teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. 70
- TPO 25 73
- When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects (TPO 33) 60
- To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors- TPO 29 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
...y and clients. As a result of this, the companies income will rise significantly, benefit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08831168831 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75254830641 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548051948052 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3411032339 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.105263158 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2631578947 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2619354877 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767351764406 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100000983945 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189570368665 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107560514128 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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