Some countries encourage teenagers to have a part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Discuss both and give your opinion.
While youngsters are motivated to do half-time work in some nations which is considered a positive trend, others oppose it. in my opinion, they should be encouraged to work part-time, but only after the age of fifteen for preventing certain harsh consequences associated with it.
On the one hand, juveniles working half-time are often exposed to exploitation because they are not mature enough to understand their rights at workplaces and the nefarious intentions of others; as a consequence, they often work in the inhospitable situations and at low wages. For instance, according to a report published in The Cosmopolitan, a famous International magazine, about 71% of the part-time waiters having age between thirteen to fifteen are the victims of physical and emotional harassment in the developing countries. Moreover, education of children is negatively impacted when they work in the evenings for earning money. To illustrate, due to having a busy schedule, it becomes arduous for them to dedicate appropriate time for contemplating on the academic subjects, leading to a poor performance in the examinations.
On the other hand, people advocating working after school hours to be beneficial for children argue that it is helpful for developing the social skills among them. In other words, it provides them with an opportunity to interact with the society owing to which they learn ways to show rectitude and politeness to other, which makes them the civilized members of the community. Besides this, while doing team jobs, they learn coordination, cooperation, leadership skills and discipline, which prepare them for the adulthood.
Finally, I think that only those youngsters who are fifteen years old should be encouraged to do part-time jobs because at this age, they could be effectively taught about their rights at workplace and methods to handle the intricate situations which could malign them, which will assure safety and security of these young workers.
To conclude, while people may vary in their opinions, I believe that juveniles should be motivated to indulge in a part-time job, but only after getting fifteen since at this age, they are able to analyse and respond according to the situation.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, if, may, moreover, so, while, for instance, i think, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3342776204 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93541016342 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555240793201 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.0821625242 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.181818182 106.682146367 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0909090909 20.7667163134 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2727272727 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136836027138 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587404041677 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393104644828 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0886570446063 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413604617723 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 13.0946893788 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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