The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.You should write at least 150 words.

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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
You should write at least 150 words.

The bar graphs illustrates the proportion of the people who bought three different categories of music albums based on gender and age in Britain. Overall, it is clear that men are more interested in music when compared to women. While pop and rock music were much popular among middle-aged people, older people preferred to buy classical music.
To begin, the number of men who purchased music albums was greater than that of women in all the three cases. The number of men who bought pop and rock musical albums was just over a quarter and this was almost 18% in case of women. However, total number of people interested in classical music was 3 times less when compared to other two categories among men and is 6% for women.
Moreover, from the graph, it is clear that people above 25 years of age and below 34 years enjoyed music to a large extent. Youngsters who bought pop and rock albums between 16 and 24 years of age was same accounting to 30% and this was almost 1% for classical music. Preference for pop and rock music was highest among people with 25 to 34 years of age and this craze gradually decreased with age. In contrast, around 20% of people who are above 45 years acquired classical music albums. All in all, both youngster and middle-aged people enjoy pop and rock music and classical music is mostly preferred by older people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'illustrate'.
Suggestion: illustrate
The bar graphs illustrates the proportion of the people who bought...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1110.0 965.302439024 115% => OK
No of words: 241.0 196.424390244 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60580912863 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33175085163 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473029045643 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 334.8 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.5486723144 43.030603864 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.909090909 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9090909091 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180055331852 0.215688989381 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877915527085 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385964153972 0.0843802449381 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135528409093 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035966094806 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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