The governments' investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead.
There is no doubt that art has made significant contribution to human’s life in today’s world. Therefore, while I accept that it is necessary for the national authorities to provide funding for public services, I strongly disagree with the idea that it is not worth subsidizing artworks.
On the one hand, I accept that governments should allocate resources to improve public services. This will result in a better quality of life for citizens. For instance, in Viet Nam, there is a great demand for more types of public transportation such as buses, since not many people are affordable to own a motorbike or car to get to their workplace. In addition, more public green spaces will provide people with tranquility and relaxation, which will make them feel more comfortable with city lives.
On the other hand, it is undeniable that works of art are of importance to people’s lives these days. Firstly, it is artistic creation that help people recognize and appreciate the beauty of humans and natures, which make them be more grateful and positive. Secondly, art can also be considered as a form of entertainment. In fact, students who are under pressure from their schools and studies tend to listen to music as a way to reduce stress and boost emotions. Finally, through arts, many inspirational artists are capable of conveying meaningful messages to many people and expressing their own ideas.
In conclusion, despite a need of investment in public services, I assume that governments should pay equal attention to artworks and people producing arts. Arts play a vital role and create great values to our society.
- Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. 61
- Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. How do you think this has changed the way we work. Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology? 78
- The governments' investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. 78
- Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree 85
- Should teachers have cooperative classrooms or competitive classrooms? Discuss both views and give your own opinion 78
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...and create great values to our society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11895910781 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91693908102 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60594795539 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8679851863 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.923076923 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8461538462 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139345720166 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0468288728402 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733643780022 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885119431969 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640301953704 0.056905535591 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.