Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this.
Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Many private businesses contribute their money to sports in order to be advertised by them. It is thought by some that it is beneficial while there are others who argue that it has drawbacks. In my opinion, while sports advertise unhealthy products, I believe that it helps sports to develop and attract new people.
On the one hand, according to some people, many sponsored sports by private business have to advertise unhealthy foods and beverages, that are threaten human’s health. This is because many companies want to advertise their products through sport as it attract many people, therefore, manufacturers of unhealthy products give money to sports and sports advertise them. Furthermore people start to think that it is healthy product as it is advertised by sport. For instance, famous footballer Ronaldo advertised Pepsi, many people started to think that Pepsi is healthy.
On the other hand, It is often thought by many people that sports become more developed and attract more people as it can offer them appropriate conditions, when it sponsored by businesses and I agree. When sport sponsored by private companies, it can afford to buy expensive and modern equipment, sports can buy high quality uniforms for members and pay them good salary, therefore, people have an opportunity to do what they found of and earn good money. For instance, Football is very popular and members earn tremendous money due to that all big companies around the world sponsor them money.
In conclusion, despite people have different views, I consider that private companies should contribute their money to sport as it beneficial to it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'threatened'.
Suggestion: threatened
...unhealthy foods and beverages, that are threaten human's health. This is because ma...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ey to sports and sports advertise them. Furthermore people start to think that it is health...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2030075188 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71862481989 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8671905493 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.818181818 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1818181818 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.54545454545 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284260622536 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121152816068 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472008554511 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169068856097 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677087211244 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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