Some people think that the only purpose of working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.
It is true that the primary concern of working is making money. In my opinion, the monetary perks are the only thing that drives people to work industriously; people who work hard are driven by other factors.
On one hand, I totally agree that making money is the main incentive for people to work diligently. In this materialistic world, we have to pay our bills, feeding our children, and all these cannot be done without money. So, we have to work and earn money to sustain ourselves. Moreover, we are taught either by our parents or in school that the harder you worked, the more you would be rewarded. Therefore, people work industriously and presumably that they can gain more. When they have more money or assets, their living standard is likely to be improved, or even enjoy a high standard one.
On the other hand, I believe that people who work conscientiously are not merely because of money; there are other elements that motive them. Firstly, we are living in a competitive world and people who are sitting next to you may want your position or get promoted ahead than you. Therefore, people need to work even harder to compete with others in order to hold their position or advance in the job. Secondly, job satisfaction is another factor that makes people passionate about their job. Being a volunteer in Doctor Without Broder is a good example to demonstrate that people work is not merely due to monetary perk. These doctors flew to Africa, visit the poor and cure them without any paid. Apparently, they work because they want to help others, gain experience or reputation.
In conclusion, earning money is one of the motivations that drive people to work hard, but other factors like getting promoted and helping others are also contributed to people work passion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rience or reputation. In conclusion, earning money is one of the motivations ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lso contributed to people work passion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84090909091 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54340586455 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548701298701 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2050343517 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1875 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.125 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269618515066 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932847317805 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606055457976 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188299368088 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385186285114 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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