Nowadays young people spend to much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in. Disagree or agree?
In this is day and age, we are living in the world where the outbreak of fashion industries among young adults is a heated topic and often discussed. It is argued by some people that young people whose almost their time was spent in shopping centres get several detrimental impacts not only on themselves, but also on community. In some extent, I agree with that views.
There are numerous reasons that could trigger people's desire in shopping, which leads to a range of issue for the improvement of the economy together with society. I have no doubt that the more people use their time and money in shopping, the les dedication they reserve for their own line of work and even their lives. This social phenomenon which might lead to several complicated troubles including the reduction of labour productivity, raising the crime rates do not only appear in developmental countries, but also advent in many emergent nations. Vietnam perfectly exemplified this situation. As an analysis study conducted in 2015, a third of woman aged 18 to 30 living in Ho Chi Minh and Ha Noi prefered going shopping with their friends after working time to spending time with family. This research also revealed that the decline of job efficiency has been linked to the raise in hours people spent on shopping centres.
Furthermore, shopping to much can create negative impacts on people personality, especially teenagers. The burning desire with unaffordable clothes in luxurious brands could encourage them to commit an offence to earn money which could satisfy them by purchasing their favorite closet. It could be just a minor crime such as robber but it could make adolescents think that becoming law breaker is the best way leading glamorous lives. The lack of education from parents actually support for young criminals activities with no surprises.
In conclusion, I believe this trend might have too many drawbacks for both individuals and society and we should produce some solutions for this.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 23, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, so, third, in conclusion, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06382978723 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63524959419 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620060790274 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8522724986 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280881619141 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892417032205 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826820202006 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158905670091 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085953669869 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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