QQ1 : Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in traveling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the issue of converting green spaces to residential areas near the central area of cities has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that transforming eco-friendly places, such as gardens and parks, into residential buildings close to the city centre in order to reduce the amount of time devoted to commuting to and from work should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. And I wholeheartedly agree with the former stand. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should not remove environment-friendly facilities so as to build skyscrapers for citizens do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that having gardens and parks near the city business district makes it possible for employees to take a rest with greater ease in during lunchtime, helping them to unwind. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for parks and gardens close to the city centre, a multitude of working adults in the city area would have difficulty alleviating the level of stress, which could exert a negative influence on their work performance.
My opinion, however, is that constructing a myriad of apartments close to the city centre to accommodate citizens is an effective way of combating a high volume of traffic. Perhaps the most convincing reason is that if a huge number of people of working age living near the city travel to their work by foot or bike since they dwell in the area not far from their workplaces, other dwellers in suburban areas would be less likely to experience traffic congestion considering that the number of cars on roads would remarkably decrease, and this phenomenon has a positive impact on citizens' standard of living. Moreover, depriving commuters of less time dedicated to travel to work can allow employees to more focus on their employment, In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroying green areas near the city centre and building apartments are beneficial for our society for the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that removing...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ety for the reasons discussed above. .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07387862797 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87313832293 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569920844327 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.7824612199 49.4020404114 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.25 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5833333333 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300872552818 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993401763931 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530387200757 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171899534201 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439152266451 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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