Q 11: Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, the conservation of animals has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that dealing with contemporary issues of humans should take precedence over preserving animals, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should not allow animals to go extinct do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that animal protection plays a vital role in keeping biodiversity that is invaluable. In addition, to provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for making an effort to save animals, the food chain and ecosystem would be broken because of the disappearance of numerous endangered species of wildlife, exerting a detrimental influence on humans who are on the top of the food chain.
My opinion, however, is that there are a number of important global issues which more emphasis should be placed on than preventing animals from disappearing given that the protection of animals is not directly related to people's daily life. Perhaps the most pressing problem is global warming as a myriad of citizens across the globe are suffering from global warming that hinders individuals from having an improved standard of living, which can even lead to climate change. Another grave issue is global hunger directly related to the life of human beings. As a brief illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 17% of the wolrd's population died due to poverty in 2015. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the preservation of animals should not be a priority for the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16088328076 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85738949752 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615141955836 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1373760294 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.857142857 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294746349461 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820803208483 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604763417753 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154466853558 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287153429274 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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