With the pressure on today’s young people to succeed academically, some people believe that non-academic subjects at school (e.g.: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Whether non-academic subjects should be involved in the school curriculum remains a question of intense debate. While some people believed that non-academic subjects should be removed from the syllabus so that students can wholly focus on academic ones, others claim that those subject matters are of equal importance to students’ development. I personally agree with the latter idea for a variety of reasons.
First of all, forcing students on theoretical subjects would create a stressful and uncongenial school environment. Most academic subject matters seems extremely sophisticated and requires great diligence; therefore, eliminating non-academic subjects would bring about a more tedious and exhausting learning atmosphere. As a result, students are easily deprived of their learning interests and lack motivation to make progress, leading to an increasing likelihood of dropping out of school.
Secondly, non-academic subjects can be extremely beneficial to children’s development. To make it more specific, physical education can prevent obesity and consequently reduce the risks of various life-threating disease such as diabetes, heart attack, hypertension, etc. Arty subjects can promote creativity and develop cognitive skills. Down-to-earth courses such as cookery can equip students with essential life skills that can assist them when tackling different arising circumstances. Conversely, the exclusion of these subjects would raise an unhealthy, uncreative and impractical generation.
In conclusion, non-academic subjects are vital not only to children’s success but also their development. For this reason, there should be in incorporation of academic and non-academic subjects in the school curriculum so as to achieve the greatest levels of efficiency.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether non-academic subjects should be involve...
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Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... such as cookery can equip students with essential life skills that can assist th...
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Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...demic subjects in the school curriculum so as to achieve the greatest levels of efficien...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.09126984127 5.12529762239 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24791102894 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630952380952 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.564739685 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.076923077 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489085999277 0.244688304435 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16519518387 0.084324248473 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132647534768 0.0667982634062 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30472382506 0.151304729494 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11913115213 0.056905535591 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.04 12.4159519038 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.59 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whether non-academic subjects should be involve...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 399, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... such as cookery can equip students with essential life skills that can assist th...
^^
Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...demic subjects in the school curriculum so as to achieve the greatest levels of efficien...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.09126984127 5.12529762239 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24791102894 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630952380952 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.564739685 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.076923077 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3846153846 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.489085999277 0.244688304435 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16519518387 0.084324248473 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132647534768 0.0667982634062 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30472382506 0.151304729494 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11913115213 0.056905535591 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 50.2224549098 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.04 12.4159519038 145% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.59 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.