We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned only with our own communities and countries. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that we should not help people from other nations; we solely have to pay attention to our own society instead. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the idea, and here is my explanation for this.
On the one hand, I admit that helping our neighbors and fellow citizens should be prioritized. First and foremost, people in our own country often face a lot of social issues such as poverty and deforestation. In Vietnam these days, for example, it is noticeable to see there are still many homeless people and beggars on the streets, some people even involve themselves in social evils in order to make ends meet. Furthermore, in the central region during the summertime, because of the heatwaves people often suffer from bushfires and drought. As a result, it gives rise to a huge decline in food and shelter. Therefore, I can understand why caring about people in our own country should be concerned the most
On the other hand, I believe that it would be wrong to not help people from other countries when we have enough ability to assist them. This is because, if we help people around the world, that means we are contributing to creating a good relationship with those people in those countries, and we might get help from them later on if we were in any emergency cases. For example, in the past, Cuba which is an underdeveloped country used to help Vietnam a lot by supporting the fight against America. For that reason, Vietnam also helped them back by providing food, machinery, and equipment. Therefore, I think helping people from other nations is always the right thing to do when we are not only saving people’s lives but also benefiting from those people.
In conclusion, I believe it is the most important thing to help our community. At the same time, we also should take into consideration helping people around the world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...own country should be concerned the most On the other hand, I believe that it wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78395061728 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63184570159 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543209876543 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7707653287 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.714285714 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323354920678 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111908907824 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823206276544 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208191561987 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458537248289 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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