schools should focus more on teaching students how to succeed in the world of work and less on how to succeed academically. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people hold the viewpoint that schools are supposed to attach more importance to helping student perform well in workplace instead of pay attention to their academic achievement. Although the former perspective is partly sensible in current society, I tend to believe teachers should concentrate more on study aspects.
On one hand, it is understandable that some people argue that the success in workplace should be highlighted at school. One of the main reason is that the ultimate goal of college is to equip students with professional expertises, helping them prepare for their future career according to major. Paying more attention to practical skills and knowledge than academic theories is a efficient way to cultivate ready worker for certain field, which not only allows them adapt to work environment quickly but also help company save training fees.
On the other hand, I still believe academic performance is equally important as vocational development at college and even much signficant at primary and high school stages. First of all, students are better to focus on academic performance to lay a solid foundation of basic subjects like math and literature, helping them develop a better mindset as well as the ability of learning by themselves and lifelong learning which should be cultivated from a young age and would definitely contribute to their future career success at the end. Secondly, being adept at academic study also play a sighnificant role in workplace success especially in certain domian which requires a higher level of profession. For example, doctors and nurses have to experience various demanding examinations and years of academic learning prior to becoming success at medical service area.
In conclusion, although vocational education is critical at college, I prefer that teachers should focus more on students’ academic success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42517006803 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85688571891 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.3549552743 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.5 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137534011013 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614544451789 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383692380461 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10502937707 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323599555661 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.8 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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