It is common an aspiration among many young people to run their own business, rather than work as an employer
Do you think the advantages of working for yourself outweight the drawbacks ?
Give reasons for you answer and include any revelant examples from your own knowledge and experience
Write at least 250 words
In recent years, there has been a growing interest in starting your own business among many young people. They believe that running a business has many advantages over working for someone else. Although there are obvious benefits to running their own business, I feel that the disadvantages are enormous.
As the first point of discussion, setting up your own business has several benefits. Firstly, you have the freedom to make your own choices instead of following other decisions, plan and manage your own company. You can also set the goals for the business yourself. Secondly, you will be able to get the credit and keep the profits if your company is successful. For example, if you set up a company and it goes well, you will be able to make substantial profits. And not only that you can also create job opportunities for many others.
In contrast to the previous argument there are those who argue that running a business means to have overcome many difficulties. One is the financial burden; not only will you incur a large debt from the bank but also the amount to pay the employee's monthly salary and other expenses. This will be a huge amount of money and it often takes a long time to get paid by customers. The second big problem is hiring staff. It is not easy to find some really good people who are truly aligned with the company’s direction and will stick with the company for a long time.
In summary, in light of the argument presented , being independent and making your own decisions is something that can be found in working as an employee, but in my view there is no doubt there are some risks associated with running your own business. Therefore, on balance, the challenges of starting up your business outweigh the advantages
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Suggestion: ,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...up your business outweigh the advantages
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in contrast, in summary, no doubt, in contrast to, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74918566775 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54446044728 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543973941368 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3537221346 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.125 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279663011668 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941918516144 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659027957053 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162876472219 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656885371298 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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