It is important for school children to study music, art and sport as it is for them to become literature and numerate. How far do you agree with this statement? support your point of view with reasons and / or examples from your own experience.
Since the beginning of the 21st century, modern schools have adopted new learning system which obliges schools to teach music, art and sport. Some people believe that teaching these sciences have become mandatory and they are essential in children lives, while others argue that there are other important topics to be learned to the schools children which are considered more important, such as, mathematics, chemistry and physics. This essay will discuss the reasons why schools have to teach their students art, sport and music in similar to other essential topics.
Teaching topics, such as sport, art and music is essential because teaching these subjects will increase the talent at these children. Nowadays, the richest people are either singers or sport players. For example, there are a significant number of sport academic are established in different countries these days, which look after talent children. Therefore, schools should teach their children music, art and sport in parallel with other essential topics, such as physics and mathematics.
On the other hand, some people think that teaching art, sport and music in parallel with other essential topics may affect on children concentration. Children will consume little time on the important topics. For example, instead of studying mathematical 12 hours per week, they spend only five hours. These people are unaware of the fact that subjects such as music and sports are equally importance of other subjects. Thus, schools should adopt the system which obligates all students to learn sport, art and music in parallel of learning other essential topics.
In conclusion, this essay discussed why schools should teach their students art, sport and music. In my opinion, I believe that learning topics relate to music, sport and art is very important and it is the first step to become a singer or a sport player.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to sport'
Suggestion: to sport
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 8.36945812808 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 20.9802955665 95% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 31.9359605911 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.75862068966 35% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1207.87684729 132% => OK
No of words: 301.0 242.827586207 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28239202658 5.00649968141 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43404403596 2.71678728327 90% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 139.433497537 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478405315615 0.580463131201 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 460.8 379.143842365 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.6157635468 108% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8288051451 50.4703680194 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.571428571 104.977214359 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.9669160288 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.25397266985 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 2.75862068966 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 2.91625615764 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218180492525 0.242375264174 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967672317709 0.0925447433944 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033945632818 0.071462118173 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162399138565 0.151781067708 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0118609351142 0.0609392437508 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 12.6369458128 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.1260098522 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 11.5310837438 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32886699507 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 55.0591133005 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.94827586207 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.5123152709 133% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 63.0 Out of 90
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