Q1 Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, the issue of converting green spaces into residential areas has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that superseding eco-friendly facilities near the central area of the city by residential buildings in order to reduce time devoted to commuting to work should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should not remove environment-friendly amenities close to the city centre so as to erect apartment blocks do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that having gardens and parks near the city centre makes it possible for a multitude of employees to take a rest during their lunchtime. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for green places for workers, they would have difficulty alleviating the level of stress, which can even exert a detrimental influence on their work performance.
My opinion, however, is that it is an effective way of combating a high volume of traffic to substitute a myriad of skyscrapers accommodating citizens for green areas near the central business district. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that if numerous working people residing close to the CBD travel to the workplace by foot or bike, other dwellers in suburban areas would be less likely to suffer from traffic congestion, leading the masses to have an improved standard of living. This is because the number of personal vehicles on roads would remarkably decrease. Moreover, depriving employees of less time dedicated to commuting to work often allows them to concentrate more on their occupations. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroying parks and gardens near the city centre and erecting housing estates are necessary for the reasons discussed above.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ndly amenities close to the city centre so as to erect apartment blocks do so for severa...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroyi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23099415205 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95377361427 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.736148883 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.785714286 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4285714286 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293221943833 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781998615469 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595550969298 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158641653893 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340404502564 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ndly amenities close to the city centre so as to erect apartment blocks do so for severa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroyi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23099415205 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95377361427 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611111111111 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.736148883 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.785714286 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4285714286 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293221943833 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781998615469 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595550969298 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158641653893 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340404502564 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.