According to a recent report by our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the last year. Clearly, the content of these reviews is not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not in the quality of our movies but with public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater quantity of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.
In the given memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company, the author concludes that they should allocate a greater share of budget next year to reach the public through advertsing because of the problem that lies with the public's lack of awareness about availability of movies of good quality. The author supports his argument with three assumptions, if not substantiated, dramatically weakens the persuasiveness of the argument.
First of all, the author claims that fewer people attended Super Screen Production movies than any other year but, the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers increases during that year. However, author have not provided more information about those movie reviewers. If these are the real reviews then, there are many ways these reviews can be transmitted to general people through various communication mediums. It sounds that, these reviews are bogus that are written by bots. It is possible that these reviews only resides in their website whose visitor per day rate is very low. If these scenario are true, then the authors claim about increase in reviews is subjected a doubt.
Second of all, The memo claims that, the content of these reciews are not reaching enough to their prospective viewers. However, this may not be true. Perhaps, the quality of movie is so bad that they are not transmitted to enough people. who will recommend the bad quality movies anyway. They need to invest their budget on creating a good quality movies than advertising. If the movie is so bad and budget is invested in advertisement then, it will not increase the return of investment as expected.
Finally, Author assumes that their next year movie will be of good quality that it worth great share of budger on advertisement, This may not be true. Author shouldn't make such decision looking at the past result of movies not knowing whether it was actually of good or bad quality. It is uncertain that the next movie will be liked by general people or not. Thus, the decision about budget allocation should be done meticulously and with good judgement about the past datas.
In Conclusion, It is possible that allocating a great share of budger next year to reach public through advertising will increase awareness about their movies. However, author supports his argument with three unfounded assumptions which renders the conclusion unpersuasive at best and specious at wrost. Thus, Author should have at least these evidences to support his claim: if the reviews are fake or real, Is the movie so bad that impeded its pervasion upto peoples, and Is their next year movie going to be of good quality.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the given memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company, the author concludes that they should allocate a greater share of budget next year to reach the public through advertsing because of the problem that lies with the public's lack of awareness about availability of movies of good quality.
Error: advertsing Suggestion: advertising
Sentence: Second of all, The memo claims that, the content of these reciews are not reaching enough to their prospective viewers.
Error: reciews Suggestion: reviews
Sentence: However, this may not be true.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Finally, Author assumes that their next year movie will be of good quality that it worth great share of budger on advertisement, This may not be true.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: budger Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Author shouldn't make such decision looking at the past result of movies not knowing whether it was actually of good or bad quality.
Error: shouldn Suggestion: should
Sentence: Thus, the decision about budget allocation should be done meticulously and with good judgement about the past datas.
Error: judgement Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In Conclusion, It is possible that allocating a great share of budger next year to reach public through advertising will increase awareness about their movies.
Error: budger Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, author supports his argument with three unfounded assumptions which renders the conclusion unpersuasive at best and specious at wrost.
Error: unpersuasive Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: wrost Suggestion: wrist
Sentence: Thus, Author should have at least these evidences to support his claim: if the reviews are fake or real, Is the movie so bad that impeded its pervasion upto peoples, and Is their next year movie going to be of good quality.
Error: pervasion Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: upto Suggestion: unto
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 443 350
No. of Characters: 2179 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.588 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.919 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.548 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.518 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this scenario' or 'these scenarios'?
Suggestion: this scenario; these scenarios
...se visitor per day rate is very low. If these scenario are true, then the authors claim about ...
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Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Who
...y are not transmitted to enough people. who will recommend the bad quality movies a...
^^^
Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y are not transmitted to enough people. who will recommend the bad quality movies a...
^^^
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'movie'?
Suggestion: movie
...their budget on creating a good quality movies than advertising. If the movie is so ba...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...rtisement, This may not be true. Author shouldnt make such decision looking at the past ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 35, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s. In Conclusion, It is possible that allocating a great share of budger next ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, anyway, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, then, thus, at least, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2238.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 442.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06334841629 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60597738248 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4592760181 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1537622858 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.571428571 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305679509851 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963319597223 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119050119182 0.0701772020484 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175208583125 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921126760882 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.