The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

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The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The presented pie charts compare four retail sectors in terms of the percentage of Internet market share they occupied in 2005 and 2010.

Generally, it is evident that substantial changes were shown in all four categories. However, while the figures for video games as well as food and beverage increased, those of home furnishing and electronics & appliance expressed opposite trends.

Turning into detail, electronics and appliances was estimated as the largest sector among 4 categories in 2005 with 35% of online sales, followed by a 25 – per cent rate of home furnishings. However, both sectors expressed significant declines five years later: when the percentage of home furnishings plunged to 15%, that of electronics appliances decreased by 5%.

By contrast, there were upward trends in percentages of food and beverage also video games. Indeed, accounting for 18% in 2005, the figure for video games grew sharply to reach 23% in 2010. Likewise, that of food and beverage increase considerably by 10% after 5 years, surpassing electronics and appliances as the largest sectors among 4 categories.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...lectronics appliances decreased by 5%. By contrast, there were upward trends in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, likewise, so, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39428571429 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9144127458 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 279.9 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8490669129 43.030603864 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113793900907 0.215688989381 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505496040609 0.103423049105 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544379573345 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784891160655 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537520798376 0.0819641961636 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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