The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the article discusses the environment and the kind of place a retire">retiree is better to live at. He supposed that a retiree has to look for a clearview place and a quiet place away from the neighboring towns in general. In almost all of his recommendations, the author used assumptions that are questionable in terms of their veracity and need more investigation to appear more realistic.
First, the article itself and all the kind of recommendations that have taken place in the argument, doesn't tackle the subject from a retiree point of view. In other words, the recommendations are not said to be taken from a survey a a questionaire that asked retirees about their preferences in the choice of the place they want to retire at.
Furthermore, the article states that the costs of the housing have fallen in clearview in the past year, not considering any kind of comparison between the prices in the neighboring towns and clearview. As the author made a comparison between taxes in both places, such a comparison had to be made also in the housing prices. that is, prices dropping in one place doesn't by necessity mean that they are cheaper than other places.
Finally, the author uses the improvement of schools in clearview places as something that attracts the retirees to live there, not considering that schools may not be something of interest for them as they are retiring. also the author stated that the number of phisycians in one place means that health care there should be better, not considering if the physicians there are actually there to work or just have their minds being cleared. also, giving someone recommendations about a place and telling them that this is better for them because they need more health care than others, may somehow indirectly affect their psycological health, thinking that they are too old to live ordinary life.
In conclusion, while a reasonable person might think that such places is better for old people and more suitable for them, one can think that just giving someone recommendations about a place to live without considerations about their preferences or their thoughts about that might look a weak argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: He supposed that a retiree has to look for a clearview place and a quiet place away from the neighboring towns in general.
Error: clearview Suggestion: cleared
Sentence: In other words, the recommendations are not said to be taken from a survey a a questionaire that asked retirees about their preferences in the choice of the place they want to retire at.
Error: questionaire Suggestion: questionnaire
Sentence: Furthermore, the article states that the costs of the housing have fallen in clearview in the past year, not considering any kind of comparison between the prices in the neighboring towns and clearview.
Error: clearview Suggestion: cleared
Sentence: As the author made a comparison between taxes in both places, such a comparison had to be made also in the housing prices. that is, prices dropping in one place doesn't by necessity mean that they are cheaper than other places.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
Sentence: Finally, the author uses the improvement of schools in clearview places as something that attracts the retirees to live there, not considering that schools may not be something of interest for them as they are retiring. also the author stated that the number of phisycians in one place means that health care there should be better, not considering if the physicians there are actually there to work or just have their minds being cleared. also, giving someone recommendations about a place and
Error: clearview Suggestion: cleared
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: phisycians Suggestion: physicians
Sentence: telling them that this is better for them because they need more health care than others, may somehow indirectly affect their psycological health, thinking that they are too old to live ordinary life.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: psycological Suggestion: psychological
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1782 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.803 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.78 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.997 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.414 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.731 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.202 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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The author of the article discusses the ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...nvestigation to appear more realistic. First, the article itself and all the ki...
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Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'a' is left.
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... are not said to be taken from a survey a a questionaire that asked retire'>re...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...e of the place they want to retire at. Furthermore, the article states that the...
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Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
... to be made also in the housing prices. that is, prices dropping in one place doesnt...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
.... that is, prices dropping in one place doesnt by necessity mean that they are cheaper...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at they are cheaper than other places. Finally, the author uses the improvement...
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Line 4, column 237, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...interest for them as they are retiring. also the author stated that the number of ph...
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Line 4, column 237, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: also,
...interest for them as they are retiring. also the author stated that the number of ph...
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Line 4, column 458, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...r just have their minds being cleared. also, giving someone recommendations about a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hey are too old to live ordinary life. In conclusion, while a reasonable person...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, while, as to, in conclusion, in general, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10054347826 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33977783119 2.78398813304 120% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448369565217 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.3801597767 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.416666667 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6666666667 23.324526521 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.70786347227 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208151867685 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836466796705 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384369558579 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120456133206 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202460938242 0.0628817314937 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.3550499002 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.