Q11 Many animal species in the world are becoming extinct nowadays. Some people say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say we should concentrate more on problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Recently, animal protection has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that dealing with problems of humans should take precedence over conserving animals, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that the preservation of animals should take priority over solving issues related to human beings do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that preventing animals from disappearing plays a vital role in keeping biodiversity that is invaluable. In addition, to provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for making an effort to preserve numerous endangered species of animals, the ecosystem and food chain would be destroyed, which would exert a detrimental influence on human beings who are on the top of the food chain.
My opinion, however, is that there are a number of important global issues which more emphasis should be placed on than the conservation of animals in this globalisation era given that hindering animals from going extinct is not directly related to people's daily lives. Perhaps the most pressing problem is global warming as a multitude of citizens across the globe are suffering from global warming because not only does it accelerate the speed of climate change, but it also hinders everyday people from having an improved standard of living. Another grave issue is global hunger since it is directly linked to individuals' survival. As a brief illustration, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, approximately 17% of the world's population died due to poverty in 2015. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that tackling problems of human beings should be a top priority for the reasons discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21385542169 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82054310727 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611445783133 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.8417735562 49.4020404114 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.642857143 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298082649361 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858331488833 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605106180785 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1632828915 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411296117099 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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