QQQQQQQ!!1: Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in traveling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the issue of converting green spaces near the central area of the city into residential areas has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that superseding eco-friendly facilities, such as gardens and parks, close to the CBD by residential buildings in order to reduce time devoted to commuting to and from work should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should not remove environmental-friendly amenities near the city business district so as to establishing apartment blocks do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that having gardens and parks close to the city centre makes it possible for working adults to take a rest that helps them to unwind during their lunchtime with greater ease. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for gardens and parks for employees, a large number of working people would be less likely to alleviate the level of stress, exerting a detrimental influence on their work performance.
My opinion, however, is that it is an effective way of combating a high volume of traffic to substitute a multitude of skyscrapers that can accommodate citizens for green facilities near the city centre. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that if numerous workers residing close to their workplaces travel to work by foot or bike, other dwellers in suburban areas would not suffer from traffic congestion considering that the number of personal vehicles on roads would remarkably decrease. This phenomenon can contribute to an increase in the quality of citizen's living. Moreover, depriving commuters of less time dedicated to travelling to work enables them to focus more on their occupations. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroying green places close to the city centre and erecting housing estates are necessary for the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroyi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22375690608 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96286783683 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588397790055 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.7568052896 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.071428571 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301585776789 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831534916103 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587134315381 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162348375264 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500981362793 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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