Around the world, many animal species become extinct. Some people believe that countries and individuals must try to solve this problem. Others believe that concentrating on problems of human beings is more important than those concerning species. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
There is a widely-held view among people about whether nations and individuals should handle the extinction of animal species. While there has been a growing body in favor of emphasizing human beings’ issues, I am of the opinion that we should be held accountable for the rapid extinction of creatures.
On the one hand, people in developing countries still endure from poverty, food scarcity, epidemics and natural disasters. Therefore, if global governance policies focused the countries’ resources on preserving endangered species rather than their inhabitants, it would prohibit their people from getting a higher standard of livings and comprehensive personal development. This would result in an extension of the economic meltdown, rendering the nations' socioeconomic growth ineffective.
On the other hand, it is undoubtedly true that going extinct is an essential part of the natural process, however, the rate at which it is happening is alarmingly unusual. For instance, it is recorded that approximately 26000 species have been on the verge of extinction over the last decade, nearly double the data of 100 years ago, though the exact number is difficult to calculate precisely. A mass extinction of living creatures would detrimentally influence the order of the food chain , disrupting the ecosystem’s balance and starting an ecological crisis. Moreover, in light of the proliferation of globalization, it is undeniable that the combination of overpopulation and all other people’s actions to fulfil their necessities such as overhunting, illegal hunting and the exploitation of natural resources, accounts for the biodiversity loss. If this actual situation persists in the long term, this will deteriorate the environmental degradation as well as the depletion of natural resources, preventing sustainable development and socioeconomic vitality as a whole.
In conclusion, it might seem sensible to me that even though the problems of human beings should be a concern, that is to say, the animals’ matters of life and death should be prioritized for tackling .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58990536278 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27020705519 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618296529968 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.7168887058 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.090909091 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8181818182 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8181818182 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185386522308 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600929948782 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354262775616 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108046062473 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232483848974 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.73 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.55 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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